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[绿意盎然] 【女人的４Ｐ和家庭的乱伦】

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1楼 大 中 小 发表于 2009-3-16 03:28  显示全部帖子
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1、主要的问题：既然是有剧情的，但内容的描述却没有高低潮，从头到尾都是平平淡淡，难以让读者入戏
2、太短了
3、个人觉得人物背景描述得太草率

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